Monday, March 30, 2009

you make my head shake
when you say those things you say
my soul weeps for you

3 comments:

  1. this one is sad and makes me wonder what was said...yet, i think this is a really good haiku - using the constraints of the medium against itself. it's the most poetry-like haiku i've seen of yours.

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  2. i had the last line on my list of fives and it spawned the other two lines. but now i don't like the last line for it. too huggybear poetry slammy.

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  3. maybe the last line can be something about how the things they say really affects them too - you just shake your head but how do they feel about the things they say?

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